Tom I do allways like your playing. The first take does have a freshnes that the other are missing, it sounds like you are watching yourself in a not entirely good way, like you are on the guard.
It is true that you could work on your legato. And actully slide wibrato. Do listen to singers. Jay Freedman answered my question about vibrato "do not listen to orchestra players for vibrato, listen to jazz players, the most beautiful vibrato is slidevibrato, that does take lots of practice". That was years ago, today there are plenty of orchestra players with a "vocal" vibrat, like Joe Alessi, Håkan Björkman and others. And airflow. Somebody said inconsistent airflow, and that is true, even the weak jaw position.
Your playing does show musicality good phrasing and you play with good time and in tune, mostly.
It is very difficult to make a recording in the livingroom for to be judged on the forum, you did make a good job of it Tom!
That said, I know you can play better.